ckocher: (Default)
[personal profile] ckocher

I’ve been with you longer than you know.

I’m so tired now. My trunk aches from picking up all your secrets. My legs are tired from carrying their weight. My skin has hardened from all the anger, all the fear and rage that your secrets carry with them.

I wear all of your scars too.

It wouldn’t be so hard to let some of them go. Let them fall to the ground, let them turn to bone, white in the sun. You can go back and touch them, touch the bones of your memories, to remember where you come from, but you do not have to carry them.

I should not have to carry them.

I want to rest now. So many years together, and you have never seen me, never thanked me for what I do for you. I’ve flapped my ears at you, I’ve thundered about the room trying to get your attention. But you talk pleasantly of the weather, of what you’re watching on TV tonight. You don’t look at me; you don’t talk about what lies between us.

And until you set me free or die, I will never find my own peace.

 

  ***** This is my entry for [livejournal.com profile] therealljidol - I hope you enjoy it. If you did enjoy it, I would appreciate your vote when the time comes!*****

 

 

Date: 2010-11-26 07:42 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] kehlen-crow.livejournal.com
Nice visualization

Date: 2010-11-28 01:32 am (UTC)
From: [identity profile] ckocher.livejournal.com
Thank you!

Date: 2010-11-26 07:51 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] basric.livejournal.com
An excellent entry and the only I've read so far from the elephant's point of view. Very original. Well written.

Date: 2010-11-28 01:34 am (UTC)
From: [identity profile] ckocher.livejournal.com
Thank you - this was the third entry I'd written for this round of the first time I thought about the elephant's perspective. I'm very happy that the idea sparked!

Date: 2010-11-26 07:54 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] wyliekat.livejournal.com
Awesome take - the elephant as unwilling participant.

Date: 2010-11-28 01:34 am (UTC)
From: [identity profile] ckocher.livejournal.com
Thank you!

Date: 2010-11-26 09:08 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] insomniatrix.livejournal.com
I love this!!

Date: 2010-11-26 09:32 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] bewize.livejournal.com
Great minds... *lol* I'm glad I wrote mine before I read this, and therefore I'm not going to make changes.

This, however, was really beautifully done.

Date: 2010-11-28 01:34 am (UTC)
From: [identity profile] ckocher.livejournal.com
Ha! Ah well ... thank you!

Date: 2010-11-26 10:47 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] isis-lives.livejournal.com
Mesmerizing. Very well done.

Date: 2010-11-28 01:35 am (UTC)
From: [identity profile] ckocher.livejournal.com
Thank you!

Date: 2010-11-27 07:22 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] wyrdfishes.livejournal.com
I love the imagery in this. I can see the big ears flapping, the wrinkled sad tired eyes. Awesome job.

Date: 2010-11-28 01:35 am (UTC)
From: [identity profile] ckocher.livejournal.com
Thank you very much! And yes - 'wrinkled sad tired eyes' - exactly what I was going for!

Date: 2010-11-28 03:11 am (UTC)
From: [identity profile] dreamchaser.livejournal.com
I like the imagery - especially the part about the aching trunk and hardened skin.

Date: 2010-11-28 03:24 am (UTC)
From: [identity profile] xreesex.livejournal.com
I really liked your take on this, and loved your writing.

Date: 2010-11-28 04:14 am (UTC)
From: [identity profile] barrelofrain.livejournal.com
I like this perspective. Nice work.

Date: 2010-11-28 04:40 am (UTC)
From: [identity profile] gaea-rising.livejournal.com
This is a powerful piece of writing. Well done.

Date: 2010-11-28 02:51 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] lilycobalt.livejournal.com
I liked getting the elephant's perspective on this topic! Those poor animals need their peace.

Date: 2010-11-28 05:23 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] snarkerdoodle.livejournal.com
Very well done -- I liked the mention that the secret-holder's death was the only other way to set the elephant free.

Date: 2010-11-28 07:06 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] lawchicky.livejournal.com
Great take on the topic!

Date: 2010-11-28 10:10 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] fortitudehigh.livejournal.com
I found this desperately sad, possibly because I was picturing a real live elephant. Well done.

Date: 2010-11-28 11:32 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] nyxocity.livejournal.com
So sad. Poor elephant :( But this was well-written.

Date: 2010-11-29 03:06 am (UTC)
From: [identity profile] fourzoas-reads.livejournal.com
I really liked this perspective on the topic--it must be hard to be the elephant, infinitely harder than being the people who try to avoid it.

Date: 2010-11-29 03:11 am (UTC)
From: [identity profile] tigrkittn.livejournal.com
Powerful!

Date: 2010-11-29 07:34 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] alephz.livejournal.com
Really, really great wordflow and emotional punch here. Bravo.

Date: 2010-11-30 12:53 am (UTC)
From: [identity profile] solstice-singer.livejournal.com
Very well-written!

Date: 2010-11-30 01:41 am (UTC)
From: [identity profile] joeymichaels.livejournal.com
Poor elephant!

Date: 2010-11-30 03:20 am (UTC)
From: [identity profile] roina-arwen.livejournal.com
Nicely written!

Date: 2010-11-30 04:30 am (UTC)
From: [identity profile] scriblesnbraile.livejournal.com
Awwww, poor elephant. So sad. Very well-written, too.

Date: 2010-11-30 05:10 am (UTC)
From: [identity profile] millysdaughter.livejournal.com
I like this.

Date: 2010-11-30 06:21 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] m-malcontent.livejournal.com
Love your very personal take on this subject.

Profile

ckocher: (Default)
ckocher

December 2012

S M T W T F S
      1
2345678
9101112131415
1617181920 2122
23242526272829
3031     

Most Popular Tags

Style Credit

Expand Cut Tags

No cut tags
Page generated Jul. 26th, 2017 10:40 am
Powered by Dreamwidth Studios